Weekend Writing Warriors – Restoration #10

Welcome to another snippets. I hope you will enjoy this week’s selection which is but a part of the greater whole. The idea is to present the entire short story to you 8 – 10 sentences at a time.

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“Why did Barak join them?”

Gallien sighed, “Perhaps he hoped change could happen. That his influence within the H’Rhophyans might extend to the Alaythayans. I don’t know, Demeas.”

“Or he was naive.”

“True. And maybe you are a little difficult on your brother.”

“He could have come back to The Order.”

“He is a proud man, Demeas. Much like you.”


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About John Van Vliet

Author of the soon to be released "The H'Rhophyan Chronicles", a Fantasy Adventure Serial.
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8 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors – Restoration #10

  1. Good, crisp dialogue, John. It flows smoothly. 🙂

  2. Kim Magennis says:

    How often are those traits not shared between brothers!

  3. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Barak … hoping for change… For a moment there, I channeled the 2008 US election.

  4. Yup, I can definitely sense the pride. Great snippet!

  5. Mari says:

    I like the flow of conversation here. Great snippet!

  6. Thank you all for dropping by. Your comments are always appreciated.

  7. Interesting to have family dynamics added into the situation. Great snippet!

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