Weekend Writing Warriors – Restoration #23

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I hope you will enjoy this week’s selection which is but a part of the greater whole. The idea is to present the entire short story to you 8 – 10 sentences at a time.

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Demeas contemplates on what to do next.


Demeas started walking toward the edge of town. Lost in thought about what to do next, he did not hear the boy thank him. The road the boy had pointed out led north to Ehmendha, Ghendhar’s capital. The road he was on headed east, to Khelenah.

Originally, Aphianorah consisted of three provinces: Khelenah, Ghendhar and Sendeshia. Three centuries earlier Ghendhar and Sendeshia sought independence from the oppressive Khelenahian Monarch and after a long war, Aphianorah split in three. Each province—each Kingdom—now had its own monarchy and although the dialect of each Kingdom differed, Phinoran remained the common language.

He gazed up the road the boy had pointed out as if in a trance. Demeas’ home village, Rheghanesh, was located along this road a few hours from Ehmendha. He had not been there since the pox killed his parents.


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About John Van Vliet

Author of the soon to be released "The H'Rhophyan Chronicles", a Fantasy Adventure Serial.
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8 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors – Restoration #23

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    The last line made me reevaluate what went before — as though he’s trying to put off thinking about his home village by thinking about history, instead.

  2. T. M. Hunter says:

    Good setup with the narrative, and then the twist with the final sentence. Enjoyed it!

  3. OK, wow, I’m sorry but as a reader I just absolutely glazed over at all the multisyllabic place names. The writing is very smooth and I liked Demeas’s thoughts about his own past – I like Demeas a LOT from all the excerpts we’ve had. Just might want to reconsider throwing in all that backstory/world building in one chunk.

  4. Nice bit of backstory, though I admit I would have time remembering all those names. 🙂

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