Weekend Writing Warriors – Restoration #27

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Demeas gets closer to his quarry as part 3 of “Restoration” continues.

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He decided and opened his eyes and with a click of his tongue his horse moved forward. Several times he backtracked and found what he was looking for. He gave a prayer of thanksgiving as he almost missed the barely visible tracks. Then he saw a second set of tracks parallel to those of the horse. They belonged to a man.

The thrown shoe must be causing a problem. Perhaps the horse has gone lame. This will slow him down.

His horse jerked her head, her ears moved about as if trying to isolate a sound, something Demeas could not hear.

“What do you hear, girl?”

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About John Van Vliet

Author of the soon to be released "The H'Rhophyan Chronicles", a Fantasy Adventure Serial.
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9 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors – Restoration #27

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    It seems his search is getting hotter and hotter.

  2. Peter Vialls says:

    Smart man, trusting his horse’s senses.

  3. I agree with Peter! I like how you slowly increase the tension. Of course now we’re all right on the edge of our seats!

    Could I make one small suggestion? In the first sentence, there are two “and”s that don’t seem smooth to me. If one was changed to “then” I think the sentence would flow better. Of course, you may have edited the excerpt to fit the guidelines, and in that case ignore me 🙂

    Marcia

  4. Thanks for your input. You are right, it is a little awkward. The only way to stay within guidelines was to combine 2 sentences. 🙂

  5. Animals can sense trouble! Wonder what Demeas will encounter next…

  6. Yes, animals have acute senses.

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